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Potřebovala bych pomoci s opravou anglického textu

Druhým rokem se pokouším o angličtinu, teď jsme dostali úkol a to napsat příběh ve kterém musí být určitá slova, něco jsem vymyslela, ale potřebovala bych opravit chyby, předem děkuji, nebráním se ani tomu, když byste chtěli nahradit nějaké slovo jiným, slova která v textu musí být jsou označená **slovo**

Cat’s story
One cat lives in the village of Kocourkov. Her name is Vločka, she’s white, nice, she has got the **deep** **green** eyes, she is well behaved and she likes playing. Vločka is **beautiful**. Vločka has got a favourite toy, it’s a little grow mouse. The name of the mouse is Ferda. Vločka run fast with Ferda and she plays with Ferda. **Unfortunately**, Vločka is **suddenly** injuring Ferda and Ferda is disappearing. Vločka is **suddenly** verry **unhappy**. The parents are **immediately** a new mouse, but a mouse is plush and Vločka doesn’t like a plush mouse. All are looking for the mouse Ferda, but they can’t the mouse find. Ferda is liing **angry** and **quietly** under the arm-chair. Vločka is going and she is verry sad, she can go out with a dog and her friends, outside is sunny and **hot**, but she doesn’t go, she feels lonely be with Ferda, Ferda is away. Vločka can’t at night sleep and she is criing. Ferda is seeing it and he is telling: Vločka is feeling sorrow maybe. Vločka is falling asleep at 3 o’clock. Ferda is wake morning Vločka. Vločka is verry happy and she doesn’t harm Ferda, she is **carefully**. Vločka and Ferda are **suddenly** best friends, they play together, they sleep and eat together and they like tolking together.
Témata: angličtina

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Cats´ story
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nemá tam být v té první větě: One cat lives in the village Kocourkov?
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2x ne:
1. jde li o 1 kocku pak je to "Cat's story." neboli "A story of a/one cat". Jde-li o vice kocek pak je to "Cats' story." neboli "A story of cats."
2. "the village of Kocourkov" je v poradku, je to poeticka forma "a village called Kocourkov" nebo "the Kocourkov village".
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a ted k tomu clanku:
(fraze/slova mezi znakama # jsou opraveny)

#One/A/This/My# cat lives in the village of Kocourkov. Her name is Vločka, she’s #nice,# white #and she's got# **deep** **green** eyes#.# She is well behaved and she likes playing. Vločka is **beautiful**. Vločka has got a favourite toy #-# it’s a little grow mouse. #His name# is Ferda. Vločka #runs fast around/hangs around# with Ferda and she plays with Ferda. **Unfortunately**, Vločka **suddenly** #injures# Ferda and Ferda #disappears#. Vločka **suddenly** #gets/becomes very# **unhappy**. The parents #are immediately# going to buy# a new mouse, but #the# mouse is plush and Vločka doesn’t like #such# a plush mouse. #They are all# looking for ## Ferda, but they can’t #find him#. Ferda is #lying# #**angrily**# and **quietly** under #an# arm-chair. Vločka is #coming over# and she is #very# sad, she #could# go out with a dog and her friends, #because it is sunny and hot# outside, but she #won't# go, she feels lonely #now, when# Ferda is away. Vločka can’t #sleep# at night and she is #crying#. Ferda is #watching her# and #he will say eventually#: "Vločka #may be feeling# sorrow". Vločka is falling asleep at 3 o’clock. Ferda #wakes Vločka up in the morning#. Vločka is #very# happy and she "won't" harm Ferda #any more#, #she will play# **carefully** #with him##. Vločka and Ferda "become the" best friends, they play together, they sleep and eat together and they like #talking# together.
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Heled, normalne se vypravi v minulem case, ale lze pouzit i protomnej - tak jak to delas ty, ale gramatickej standard to neni. Ale lid to bezne pouziva, o tom zadna. Ja jenom nevim co na to rekne pani ucitelka :))
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jen par poznamek k tem chybam:
1. pridavnu jmena, je-li jich vic pred podstatnym jmenem, maji svoje urcene poradi. A nice, white cat. A black czech leather guide-book. Poradi najdes nekde v ucebnici.
2. Ma-li zvire jmeno, nebo kdyz vime jde-li o samce nebo samici, lze pouzit "him/her" misto "it".
3. To be angry / to look angrily

bylo tam hodne chyb a v tomhle malym okinku je to spatne videt, takze jsem tam mohl neco nechat nebo jsem tam mohl udelat chybu i ja, tak jestli bude neco nejasnyho tak ze ptej.
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Já ti moc děkuju, kdyby si měl chvilku, dám to sem tak, jak jsem to podle tebe opravila, tak kdyby se ti chtělo, můžeš to projít ještě jednou a ještě jednou moooc díky

Cat’s story

One cat lives in the village of Kocourkov. Her name is Vločka, she’s nice, white and she has got deep green eyes, she is well behaved and she likes playing. Vločka is beautiful. Vločka has got a favourite toy - it’s a little grow mouse. His name is Ferda. Vločka runs fast around with Ferda and she plays with Ferda. Unfortunately, Vločka suddenly injures Ferda and Ferda disappears. Vločka suddenly becames verry unhappy. The parents are immediately going to buy a new mouse, but the mouse is plush and Vločka doesn’t like such a plush mouse. They are all looking for Ferda, but they can’t find him. Angry Ferda is lying quietly under an arm-chair. Vločka is coming over and she is very sad, she could go out with a dog and her friends, because it is sunny and hot outside, but she won’t go, she feels lonely now, when Ferda is away. Vločka can’t sleep at night and she is crying. Ferda is watching her and he will say eventually: Vločka maybe feeling sorrow. Vločka is falling asleep at 3 o’clock. Ferda wakes Vločka up in the morning. Vločka is very happy and she won’t harm Ferda anymore, she will play carefully with him. Vločka and Ferda become the best friends, they play together, they sleep and eat together and they like talking together.
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Unfortunately, Vločka suddenly injures Ferda and Ferda disappears.

jen bych se ještě chtěla zeptat, proč nebude v této větě průběhový čas, stane se to jen jednou a ne opakovaně,... njn je vidět, že jsem v angličtině začátečník, ale snažím se
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Heled cely je to vypraveni pribehu z minulosti, ale vypravis to v pritomnym case prostym, coz se dela v hovoru, obcas v knize ale ne v domacim ukolu.
priklad:
"Sedel jsem v hospode a nejednou ke mne prisel chlapik a pozadal mne o ohen."
Gramaticky spravne: "I was sitting in the pub and suddenly this guy approached me and asked me for a light."
normalne, lidove, v beznem hovoru: "I am sitting in the pub and suddenly this guy approaches me and askes me for a light."

No a takhle to mas napsany ty. Ja nevim, jestli se to bude ucitelum libit, to je na nich :)). Jinak bys to musela hodit cely do minulosti. Je tam tezky urcit co je spatne, protoze zakonitosti hovorovy anglictiny mi nejsou uplne jasny.

Ja bych to proste hodil cely do minulosti a bylo by po problemech:
"There was a cat named Vlocka who lived in the village of Kocourkov...."
Udelej to a ja ti to sjedu.
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I tak jsou tam nejaky chybicky, ktery jsem tam koukam zanes ja, ale opravim je az v ty cisty verzi. Mozna, ze je najdes sama.
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No, na jednu se nemuzu koukat - takze:
"Vločka maybe feeling sorrow." je blbost
"Vločka is maybe feeling sorry/sad." je dobre
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Tak jsem se o to pokusila, má to být jako pohádka, proto jsem to zprvu chtěla v přítomném čase, ale v minulosti to bude asi opravdu lepší,...

Cat’s story

One cat lived in the village of Kocourkov. Her name was Vločka, she was nice, white and she had got deep green eyes, she was well behaved and she liked playing. Vločka was beautiful. Vločka had got a favourite toy – it was a little grow mouse. His name was Ferda. Vločka ran fast around with Ferda and she played with Ferda. Unfortunately, Vločka suddenly injured Ferda and Ferda disappeared. Vločka suddenly became very unhappy. The parents were immediately going to buy a new mouse, but the mouse was plush and Vločka didn’t like such a plush mouse. They were all looking for Ferda, but they couldn’t find him. Angry Ferda was lied quietly under an arm-chair. Vločka was coming over and she was very sad, she could go out with a dog and her friends, because it was sunny and hot outside, but she won’t go, she felt lonely now, when Ferda was away. Vločka couldn’t sleep at night and she was crying. Ferda was watching her and he willed say eventually: Vločka is maybe feeling sorry. Vločka was falling asleep at 3 o’clock. Ferda woke Vločka up in the morning. Vločka was very happy and she won’t harm Ferda anymore, now, she will play carefully with him. Vločka and Ferda become the best friends, they play together, they sleep and eat together and they like talking together.
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Tak to je mnohem lepsi :) Uz tam byly jen nejaky drobnosti, castecne zpusobeny mnou, castecne tebou. Takze:

Vlocka loved to run fast around ...
Unfortunately Vlocka once injured Ferda ...
The parents went immediately ...
So they were all looking ...
Angry Ferda was lying ...

Vločka was very sad. She could go out with a dog and her other friends, because it was sunny and hot outside, but she wouldn’t go - she felt lonely now, when Ferda was away.

Ferda was watching her and he would eventually say: Vločka looks like she is feeling sorry.

Vločka fell asleep at 3 o’clock.
In the morning Ferda woke Vločka up.

Vločka was very happy - she wouldn’t harm Ferda anymore. Now, she would play

they played together, they slept and ate together and they liked talking together again.

tak a pohadka je hotova, tomu uz chybi jen "Once upon a time there was ..." :))

pozor na to will, ktery jsi pouzivala v minulosi - to prechazi na would.
would vyjadruje
1. neco co se delo v minulosti s durazem na trvani a opakovani deje: "my dad would sit on the bench every single day" - sedaval na lavicce
2. podminku: "he wouldn't hurt her anymore"
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Tady je jeste jedno pouziti pomocnyho slova would v minulosti:
"Ferda was watching her and he would eventually say:" nevim proc, ale je to urcite dobre. Jestli ale nechces nic riskovat dej tam "he eventually said:"
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to "Vločka was coming over" jsem vypustil uplne, to nedava v minulosti smysl. Kdyztak "Vlocka was walking around the flat, feeling very sad."
come over = prijit nekam, takze maximalne "Vlocka came over", ale to tam nezapada.
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strašně mooc děkuju, jsi zlato
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