Angličtina - sloh kontrola prosím

Anonym45430517.09.2012 17:30 Nahlásit
When I was younger, I had a lot of ideas, what I want to do in my life. Of course, I wanted to be a princess when I was a little girl. After, when I was in the preschool, I wanted to be a teacher. I was very much looking forward to school. At home,I have played, that I am a teacher and my stuffed animals are my pupils. I taught a maths, drawing, writing and so on, and I gave them only good marks. I enjoyed to play that I am a teacher and I teach my students new things. It was my dream job for a long time. But when I was a little older, the seriál Editor´s office was on the television and I decided to be a journalist. I enjoyed writing and I thought that this work will be same, like in this seriál. I have one more job, which I wanted to do, when I was younger. When I first flew by plane on holiday, I really liked to work of flight attendants. I wanted to know new places and different languages. But in the end, I didn´t choose any of those profession. This year, I am going to give the application to medical school and I hope that they will accept me. I am thinking about a dentist or a pediatrician. I chose this profession, because I want to help people.

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kratasr17.09.2012 17:38 Nahlásit
To je zbytečný, učitel/ka ti to opraví. Já bych to celý přepsal, ale když ti nevysvětlím proč je to tak a tak, nepomůže ti to.
Spoony17.09.2012 18:00 Nahlásit
Teď záleží na tom, jestli byste už měli umět takhle skládat věty, nebo se snažíš o něco nového, ale špatně.
Anonym45430517.09.2012 18:09 Nahlásit
tak jsem to zkusila jinak trochu neco... je to lepsi?
When I was younger, I had a lot of ideas, what I want to do in my life. Of course, I wanted to be a princess when I was a little girl. After, when I was at preschool, I wanted to be a teacher. At home,I was playing, that I was a teacher and my stuffed animals were my pupils. I taught them a maths, drawing, writing and so on, and I gave them only good marks. I wanted to be a teacher because I wanted to give some informations to my students. And it was my dream job for a long time. But when I was a little older, the seriál Editor´s office was on the television and I decided to be a journalist. I liked this seriál and I didn´t have a special reason for this dicision. Flight attendant was the other job what I wanted to do. I decided for it, when I first flew by plane on holiday. I wanted to know new places and different languages.
But I didn´t choose any of those profession. This year, I´ll give the application to medical school and I hope, they´ll accept me. I am thinking about a dentist or a pediatrician. I chose this profession, because I want to help people.
Spoony17.09.2012 21:34 Nahlásit
2. verze je o něco málo lepší. Ale ten text je trochu chaotickej. V jedné fázi čtu samé "wanted" a "decided".
seriál - TV series; I'm giving an application/I'm applying to; Maths bez členu
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